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write a targedy again
cut yourself to stop the pain

crying on the floor
hopeing hard but hopes a whore

this is what has formed
product of a broken home

try to mend the cracks
theres no cure for growing gaps

have so much to say
cant seem to find a way

this is what has formed
product of a broken home

missing all the points
no ones listening at all

walk away and lock the door
walk away and stay alone
©2003-2009 ~babacancer
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i wrote this when i was pissed off ....obviously it reflects the fucked up way i feel.

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:iconthe-fisherman:
very very very beautiful


you should write more
:iconwar-machine:
shit man... wicked dark stuff man... u should write more often... i really like this :nod:
and by the way....

>>>:!:<<<
>>>F<<<
>>>A<<<
>>>V<<<
>>>:!:<<<

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:iconlimpidone:
I :heart: it.

~ ReD ~

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she's living in another fool's paradise
:iconlimpidone:
the first four lines are my favourite.

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she's living in another fool's paradise
:icon-elly-:
..its a really great poem, i just thing the flow could be worked on. The rhyme works really well, but i dont know about the flow.. it would be much more awesome (imo) if the flow were improved.
other than that, awesome

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Grace - God's Redemtion At Christ's Expense.

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:iconbabacancer:
ummm im gonna attempt to count how many times u said flow....hold on...................1.....2......oh damn i lost count.

anyway thanx ur critisisim is appretiated thanx
:icon-elly-:
lol, sorry.. i dont know if i was reallly really tired or tipsy, or both. sorry.. that was a rude post

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Grace - God's Redemtion At Christ's Expense.

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°jark... :heart:

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